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Thu, 08/10/2017 - 05:44 by YumiThu, 08/10/2017 - 16:45 by mizbass70
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Yesterday, our server computer, which had been always turned on, suddenly turned off and didn’t turned on again.
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Yesterday, our main computer, which is always turned on, suddenly turned off and wouldn't turn back on.
 
 
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There is an important system for making ID Cards in it so we freaked out.
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There is an important system in it that makes ID Cards, so obviously, we all freaked out.
 
 
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Then Julie told Hiroshi about it so he compelled me to create a template for temporary ID cards.
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Then Julie told Hiroshi about it, so he asked me to create a template for temporary ID cards.
 
 
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Hiroshi seemed frustrated but I didn’t want to waste time so I tried to recover the computer.
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Hiroshi seemed frustrated, but I didn’t want to waste time, so I tried to fix the computer.
 
 
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During it, I happened to find a button and pushed it. Suddenly the server turned on so I realized that the switch we tried to on was wrong switch.
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While I was fiddling with it, I happened to find a button and pushed it. Suddenly the computer was working again, so I realized that the switch we'd been using to turn it on was the wrong switch.
 
 
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This is what we laughed yesterday.
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You should've been there! We couldn't stop laughing afterwards.
Revision of Thu, 08/10/2017 - 16:45:
Writing 

Yesterday, our main computer, which is always turned on, suddenly turned off and wouldn't turn back on.

There is an important system in it that makes ID Cards, so obviously, we all freaked out.

Then Julie told Hiroshi about it, so he asked me to create a template for temporary ID cards.

Hiroshi seemed frustrated, but I didn’t want to waste time, so I tried to fix the computer.

While I was fiddling with it, I happened to find a button and pushed it. Suddenly the computer was working again, so I realized that the switch we'd been using to turn it on was the wrong switch.

You should've been there! We couldn't stop laughing afterwards.

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