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Message to the teacher 

Could you correct it so that it's more simple and colloquially natural? I want to tell this story to my friends and make her laugh.

Writing 

Yesterday, our main computer, which is always turned on, suddenly turned off and wouldn't turn back on.

There is an important system in it that makes ID Cards, so obviously, we all freaked out.

Then Julie told Hiroshi about it, so he asked me to create a template for temporary ID cards.

Hiroshi seemed frustrated, but I didn’t want to waste time, so I tried to fix the computer.

While I was fiddling with it, I happened to find a button and pushed it. Suddenly the computer was working again, so I realized that the switch we'd been using to turn it on was the wrong switch.

You should've been there! We couldn't stop laughing afterwards.

Vocabulary 
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Idiom 
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Structure 
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