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Revision of Server computer from Thu, 08/10/2017 - 05:44

Message to the teacher 

Could you correct it so that it's more simple and colloquially natural? I want to tell this story to my friends and make her laugh.

Writing 

Yesterday, our server computer, which had been always turned on, suddenly turned off and didn’t turned on again.

There is an important system for making ID Cards in it so we freaked out.

Then Julie told Hiroshi about it so he compelled me to create a template for temporary ID cards.

Hiroshi seemed frustrated but I didn’t want to waste time so I tried to recover the computer.

During it, I happened to find a button and pushed it. Suddenly the server turned on so I realized that the switch we tried to on was wrong switch.

This is what we laughed yesterday.

Wed, 08/09/2017 - 20:52 by mizbass70Thu, 08/10/2017 - 05:44 by Yumi
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