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水, 2015/08/05 - 09:57 - Matthew		水, 2015/08/05 - 11:35 - Rio
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-	My family and I went to the beach on an island in the neighboring city last Sunday. I also enjoyed canoeing with my kids, which was rented there, under the scorching sun. It was a day when the sunlight was very strong. Even though we had put on a lot of sunscreen beforehand, it turned out that we got pretty sunburned. A few days have passed since then, and my skin still hurts today. It would have been more terrible if we neglected wearing sunscreen!	+	My family and I went to the beach on an island in the neighboring city on Sunday. They had canoes for rent there, so I went canoeing with my kids, under the scorching sun. The sun was very strong that day. Even though we had put on a lot of sunscreen beforehand, it turned out that we got pretty sunburned. A few days have passed since then, and my skin still hurts today. It would have been even more terrible if we had totally neglected to wear sunscreen!

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My family and I went to the beach on an island in the neighboring city on Sunday. They had canoes for rent there, so I went canoeing with my kids, under the scorching sun. The sun was very strong that day. Even though we had put on a lot of sunscreen beforehand, it turned out that we got pretty sunburned. A few days have passed since then, and my skin still hurts today. It would have been even more terrible if we had totally neglected to wear sunscreen!

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